It was raining heavily, Robin was alone at home. The sound of thunder scared him. The sky changed colors between an electric violet and a deep, stormy black. The city rumbled rhythmically, in sync with the sullen sounds from up above…it brought back too many memories.
Robin wondered why the otherwise lively house radiated an eerie loneliness. Sighing, he got up and went to his room. The hallway was adorned with pictures of him and his parents on vacations, toasting marshmallows near a campfire, smiling just before they jumped into their pool. He closed his eyes…and it hit him all at once.
He had gone out to play in the park with Rye, that day. They were fooling around in the sandpit when the first drops of rain had hit them. The light drizzle had changed into a heavy shower very fast, and the two boys raced towards their respective houses. Just as they had gone on to the road, laughing and screaming, rain pellets hitting their face, an orange blur had come towards them at a rapid pace, its headlights blinding them.
Rye had screamed for him to move, shouted that there was a car, but Robin stood frozen. It had all happened in a matter of seconds. He remembered the wailing of the sirens, Rye’s screams, the pool of blood around him. He remembered his parents wailing, holding his hand, almost begging him to wake up…
Robin jerked back to reality. He looked at his hands, only to see the ground beneath him. He got up from his bed and went to his mirror, covered almost entirely in dust. And as he stood in front of it, his eyes caught the flicker of a candle’s flame. He followed the wisps of smoke that arose from it and saw a picture of him with a garland around it.
PS: I attempted horror for a creative writing assignment at school and it turned out pretty good, so I decided to publish it. A first attempt, so be kind.
October 31, 2020 at 9:07 am
I loved it ! I am a big fan of thrillers and thus was good. You must write more of these. Very good first attempt😘
September 11, 2020 at 2:04 pm
Very nice Trisha! Was on the edge till the end. Excellent narration, clean writing.
September 11, 2020 at 11:39 am
Woah…that ending…totally unexpected.
Amazing dude.
Super cool…
I think I won’t be able to sleep peacefully tonight…
Looking forward to more of this!!
September 11, 2020 at 9:46 am
Nice one Trisha Nani.I did feel bad for Robin and his parents. It was less horror more sad, to be honest.☺️Sara😊
September 11, 2020 at 2:21 am
Great story writing, it showcases your skill in handling various genres. Very important for a writer. Keep up the good work. God Bless
September 10, 2020 at 6:53 pm
Trisha, This is one of the shortest thrillers that I have ever read; did give me an unexpected jolt. You should keep on writing, Wish you the best.
September 10, 2020 at 6:11 pm
Wow! Really good one for a first attempt. Didn’t expect the story to end this way. Keep them coming!
September 10, 2020 at 4:31 pm
This is my favourite genre and totally unpredictable . This story reminded me of the movie sixth sense
September 10, 2020 at 12:37 pm
The end was UNEXPECTED. I had written a similar kinda story in class 7 for school assignment and the beginning was similar too but it ended with the guy waking up from his dream…..The MOST INTERESTING thing is that the 2nd last sentence gives the vibe of a “Dream” but the last sentence takes away your breath like, U smile and the next minute get stabbed.
AWESOME.